Ludum Dare 36 — August 26th-29th, 2016 — Theme: Ancient Technology

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Ben'sStories: GreatGrandfather's Story

by QwaKlak - Competition Entry

Rich story RPG with lots of mechanics. Compo. I'm kidding :) My first game on LD. Your task is to build piramid in 7 days.

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lonesurvivor says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 9:20am

The graphics look a bit messy and need some improvements.The text is hard to read. I also find it kind of hard to understand what is going on and what impacts do my actions have on the building speed.

And yeah, the exit button doesn't while in game.

Overall, good idea.

peterthehe says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 9:25am

Good idea. Could've been better executed. The graphics are good for the time the game was made in though a tutorial would be useful

FaeLD says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 9:27am

I too am a bit confused about how my actions on the slaves affect the game. I like the stickfigure animations though, poor guys killed themselves

onyon says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 10:38am

Good concept but the game is overall kind of confusing.

amras0000 says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 10:53am

Seems like the only thing I could do was whip and pet the slaves, and aside from the whipping causing my happiness to go down (or unhappiness to go up? really confused) neither option seemed to affect the game.
I need more agency, more challenge, and more feedback. This is just a really long loading screen disguised as a game :T
Some of the slave animations were cute. Maybe just having a couple sliders to the side to control meal rations, sleep time, etc would be a nice alternative to the whip/hand. And let me know how my actions are influencing the game.

QwaKlak says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 11:00am

@aras0000 "Maybe just having a couple sliders to the side to control meal rations, sleep time, etc would be a nice alternative to the whip/hand. And let me know how my actions are influencing the game." It's already is :D you can change scean when you hit arow. (meal rations, water rations, sleep, time for girls, time for prey).

asteryz says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 11:18am

Its quite fun, but your first try is impossible to get anywhere as you have no time to experiment with what the effect of settings is. Maybe days should be longer in real time so that you can try some stuff day one and then let the slaves work hard the rest of the week.

notime4games says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 11:40am

I tried several times but didn't even get past 60%
I have no idea what I'm doing wrong, I tried being nice, I tried being not so nice.
It's too bad because the game feels like it could be fun if I got some feedback

Music wasn't really my cup of tea :)

BurntFeelings says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 11:50am

game is really confusing tutorial would have been nice and you shouldnt made it so complex because its a short game and also it lacks in depth

vitineth says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 11:59am

It's a nice idea for a game and the basis is there. With a bit more work I think you could get a very cool game. The animations of the stick figures are quite cool, especially the hanging one. As others have said it would have been nice to have some indication of what your actions were doing. You mention in the guide that whipping gives a 5 second bonus on the speed so it would have been nice to see something pop up on the screen to count down or to show that there was that bonus. The graphics are quite good (at least much, much better than I could really do in that time in that style) and the only thing I could say with them would be the white borders around the stick figures. I don't know if that was intentional but for me it took up a reasonable bit of the screen and didn't quite look right. The side screen where you set the details is quite cool and being able to quickly see how much that would affect their happiness and sadness was very helpful. The only thing could be to potentially name what each of the settings did as one of them was a little difficult to figure out from a quick look. All round it is a very good idea and a quite good game (and quite difficult) and a very good attempt at LD36.

RafaCP says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 12:13pm

Nice conceptual idea.
I couldn't really see my actions influencing the game.
I tried letting the default run, I tried being the "nice guy" and also the evil overlord and couldn't see how it affected the game, up to the point I lost.
You should focus on feedback to the player. If the effects of their actions are not clear you will never engage them.

ninja00283 says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 12:23pm

So the concept is great...
But the graphics aren't.
so yeah...
Take your time for the art,
make the text easier to read and your set.

QwaKlak says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 12:27pm

Thanks to everyone for comment. Now i know what i should made better. More Feedback, More information how to play at start. That my main things which i will develop in the future. Sorry for my English skill.

Efmi_ says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 1:56pm

There could be an tutorial...

Sina says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 2:19pm

The result of players actions are not visible, maybe a "pyramid/7 days" gauge would help the player know how he is doeing at any point of time.

Vegevan says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 2:24pm

Hey I just played your game, that was funny ! As everyone said, the main problem to enjoy the game as its full potential is that we have bad feedback and we don't know how exactly our actions influences the game.
Some solutions, great the reaction to actions, a slave missing rest should have an icon, an animation and a red arrow down to show he works less. Happyness / Sadness is a good idea, maybe you should write what it implies (a work multiplicator ? A production per second (eg: 0.5%/s).
Visual are not that bad IMO, simply you made the whole thing on the whole screen so it looks so big ! The text centered would have given a better view for the same work you did.

Anyway, the concept is ambitious, I'm happy there are ambitious games ! I had fun, I'd have liked more feedback, I guess this is your real "problem" :)

Thanks mate ! :D

RobertRamsay says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 2:25pm


wheerd says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 2:38pm

The concept of the game is great. It is hard to see the effect of your actions though. The texts are hard to read and the intro disappeared before I could finish reading it. The graphics are really messy. I think this game has potential, if the player can better see what the impact of their actions is. I would love to see a more polished version of this, that could be really fun! :)

DiegoCTorguet says ...
Aug 29, 2016 @ 2:44pm

One great problem in the game is what many others have said before: it's hard to know how to play.
But the main thing I think you should improve is that you should try to narrate your story without large text boxes. It's quite more powerful to show than to say.

imphenzia says ...
Aug 31, 2016 @ 7:54am

I whipped them and they rebelled. I restarted. I whipped them and they rebelled =) I couldn't get a sense of how my tweaking parameters affected the build speed, or even what some parameters meant, but I guess the task is to identify that in the process of adjusting? Maybe not graphically the most polished thing but it's a complete game which is great.

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