Ludum Dare 33 — August 21st-24th, 2015 — Theme: You are the Monster

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Monster

by Lou Byrd - Jam Entry

Monster is a short interactive narrative depicting the not-so-beautiful side of life.


Notes
Monsters is the result a brief insight triggered by the theme. It deals with heavy topics, and carries with it lots of personal depth. However, despite being inspired by unfortunate real life experiences, it is in its entirety fictional.


Tech notes
Monsters was fully written in roughly 4 straight hours, and implemented in Twine v2.0.8 in about 2 hours
While I would like to explore the less rudentary mechanics possible, I couldn't find the time to develop it (yet?)
It is massively content based (sorry, programmers)
Also, English is not my native language.

Thank you for the interest!

Downloads and Links


Ratings

#34Theme(Jam)4.24
#61Mood(Jam)4.00
#527Overall(Jam)3.21
#915Innovation(Jam)2.45
#944Humor(Jam)1.33
#1026Fun(Jam)2.29
#1842Coolness33%

Comments

bumbu says ...
Aug 25, 2015 @ 8:37pm

Game is stuck on 2nd line of text for me

fdslk says ...
Aug 25, 2015 @ 8:39pm

*claps* Wonderful writing, story and mood with the black and grey palette. Gosh! I love text adventures just because of games like these

Andrew Deem says ...
Aug 25, 2015 @ 8:43pm

It's always amazing to me how even the simplest of stories/games can have some of the biggest impacts emotionally on an individual. Great job.

If you wanted to carry this further, I think it could be cool to have the story intermixed with some gameplay. Just an idea.

scriptorum says ...
Aug 25, 2015 @ 8:46pm

Pretty dark stuff! More of a narrative than a game, but I like how you structured the story.

athaclena says ...
Aug 25, 2015 @ 8:46pm

Really brave piece. Very, very uncomfortable to play through. You dwelt upon the subject matter so lightly and so unforgivingly. It's hard to compliment you on something that upset me so much, but I'm pretty sure that was the point, so well done.

zenmumbler says ...
Aug 25, 2015 @ 8:49pm

Uncomfortable and definitely for mature audiences only, and not in the "he says the f-word a lot-mature" sense. A surprising entry in this LD and certainly very evocative and the most real-world interpretation of the theme I've seen so far and will likely see. Damn.

Aug 25, 2015 @ 8:59pm

Thanks for letting us play your game!

What I liked:

Great atmosphere, really liked the detached, sometimes Patrick Bateman-like internal thoughts of the main character.

Liked the minimalist visual aesthetic as well and you interpretation of the theme.

Areas to develop:

Some typos and grammatical bits, which took me out of the story (but only a little bit).

Congratulations! Well done!

Dianouille says ...
Aug 25, 2015 @ 9:00pm

Well exploited theme ! Maybe more choices would have been better, but the mood was here.

K.Chplr says ...
Aug 25, 2015 @ 9:27pm

Damn.

It is certainly not fun, but it was really good nonetheless.

Even though english is not your native language and there's a few typo here and there, you did a good job with the story telling. You did not fall into the trap of self-pity and I thank you for that.

Aug 25, 2015 @ 10:15pm

Nice game.
The only criticism I would give is that the clickable options should be more visible.

collaboration says ...
Aug 26, 2015 @ 9:02am

Well, that was disturbing, have mixed feelings about this game.

Aug 28, 2015 @ 6:00pm

Well-written text-based game.

Denis347 says ...
Aug 29, 2015 @ 2:02pm

Doesnt really meet my conditions of a Game, but the story is great, that's for sure. But again, more of a book than a game.

scorched says ...
Aug 29, 2015 @ 2:06pm

Very touching!
P.S. I've found a bug (or easter egg?): when the game ends I click at the title, then an ALTERNATIVE NARRATIVE begins... Then it ends, and then starts again the first one, but with purple highlighted text instead of white...

t4u says ...
Aug 29, 2015 @ 2:28pm

I liked the writting but at some point I stopped. Too much and too dark for one go... save option would be nice

Sparrow says ...
Aug 29, 2015 @ 3:33pm

Amazing writing, disturbing but amazing. Bravo.

NidzaKornjaca says ...
Aug 29, 2015 @ 6:39pm

Cool story, quite unsettling.

randoman says ...
Aug 29, 2015 @ 10:37pm

I have the same problem as @bumbu, the game is stuck on the 2nd line of text, either on Firefox or Chrome

Mach60KAS says ...
Aug 30, 2015 @ 1:02am

// SPOILERS AHEAD //

I got angry at the dude that raped my daughter, and that means I beat her? There's one hell of a disconnect between what you've written for the choices and what actually happens.

// END SPOILER //

Apart from that it was mostly well written, but I felt that by the end I kept asking myself which choice you'd arbitrarily made more evil. Well done, kudos.

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