Ludum Dare 31 — December 5th-8th, 2014 — Theme: Entire Game on One Screen

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Like a Fairytale

by Saf - Compo Entry

A girl remembering the best days of her life through the screen of an ECG machine, while she is being treated for terrible mishap.
A short story of love and loss, open to interpretations.

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Ratings

Coolness52%
#25Mood3.97
#140Theme4.03
#314Overall3.44
#342Audio3.06
#345Innovation3.42
#400Graphics3.33
#979Fun2.56

Comments

ceosol says ...
Dec 8, 2014 @ 11:48pm

Loved the interpretation of the theme. It was fantastic. The gameplay itself was little lacking. But then the storyline completely made up for it. Going forward, I think you should have the gameplay relate more to the storyline. Maybe have metaphors become things to squish (in addition to "You gave me butterflies..." actually making butterflies appear. Also, you might be able to make the gameplay somehow relate to a heart monitor... either have the attacks on the butterflies cause a zigzag heartbeat spike... or maybe in another way.

Tater_hater says ...
Dec 9, 2014 @ 7:21am

Well done story

shanageek says ...
Dec 9, 2014 @ 4:42pm

That was really nice storytelling.
It might be that iv missed it but it would have been nice if different things happened depending on how you move/catch butterflies. Still I really liked it! :)

ceosol says ...
Dec 9, 2014 @ 10:38pm

Thanks for the comment on my game. I totally agree that the gameplay needs extras. It was not the original intention for the game to have a game board, but I was confined by the theme. As far as other extras, I just ran out of time. Had to cut my losses lol.

Jaenis says ...
Dec 10, 2014 @ 8:47pm

Such a sad story...
Really liked this one, touching

t4u says ...
Dec 10, 2014 @ 10:05pm

Nice take on screen

mrexcessive says ...
Dec 11, 2014 @ 8:30am

Hi there. Really nice story, good engagement. Such hope <;..

Dec 13, 2014 @ 11:31pm

Really nice aesthetic, well done.

tompudding says ...
Dec 14, 2014 @ 5:56pm

Sad story, nice prose!

Dec 14, 2014 @ 6:22pm

Nice to see someone do more "deeper" stuff!
Well done. It seems to be more an experience than a game, or is it?

Dec 14, 2014 @ 6:24pm

The heart beat sound is well done, would be great if it varied a bit in speed together with the story. The animations of the butterflies and heart look stunning.

danidre14 says ...
Dec 14, 2014 @ 6:34pm

Lol nice game! Did not really understand it all that clear at first though! XD

Kimau says ...
Dec 14, 2014 @ 6:36pm

Ouch that story.... Gameplay felt incidental to the story with not much of a link but yeah well done!

rantt says ...
Dec 14, 2014 @ 7:39pm

Great mood, I liked the story.

Dec 14, 2014 @ 7:44pm

the ending was fairly predictable, but the overall story was fairly strong all the same. I love the opening line "You said I looked great in green," and I thought it was cool that the amount of butterflies onscreen was kind of proportional to the emotional excitement of the memory.

LukuluK says ...
Dec 15, 2014 @ 12:40am

A good story, and a interesting way to make it move forward ! But the gameplay could be more connected to what happens (as commented before). The sound of heartbeat is cool, I think you should have some pressure at each wave of butterflies, depending on the events told in the story. I think that the butterfly sound could be more smooth (now it's like I'm squashing them).
And it's a compo entry, well done !

01rafael says ...
Dec 20, 2014 @ 9:40pm

Great concept! Catch butterflys for life! xD

OneMuppet says ...
Dec 21, 2014 @ 9:57pm

Good job on this game, I wanted to hear the end, I was a little bit disapointed because there wasn't any twist. But I enjoyed it, well done!

Si1ver says ...
Dec 21, 2014 @ 11:53pm

Normally I don't complain about games on LD but this time I want to share some thoughts on what could be done in a different way.
The whole game is just don't fit together for me.
The story is like any other sad story we can read in newspapers. It has some character to it only because it's told to player by someone who is in trouble. We have some details and random thoughts, but it's all. There's nothing making this story different from thousands other sad stories, nothing saying us why this story is unique or even just notable.
Gameplay is from another universe. It's perfectly themed but the mechanics fights with storytelling. If you concentrate on playing you just don't read. Otherwise you have to constantly switch between playing and understanding story. Either way you're loosing the story.
There are a few small things that break the mood. The monitor looks great, but the trail looks wrong. Everything about it - it's length, it's width, how it moves. Acceleration on left click looks cool thought, but I've found it only on my third playthrough. Btw, the ECG is normally on the same side of the bed where the head is.
The heartbeat sound helps a lot. Splash sound ruins everything (when the Heart touches butterfly). I don't know what she's doing with butterflies but I'm sure she's not killing them.
Personally I prefer to tell stories by visuals, not by text. This is because on visuals you don't have to make a choice between length of the story and lack of details. You can make most important things obviously seen and add any amount of additional information by small details without forcing the player to read it all. Those who are interested to know the story better will find details they are looking for. Those who are not interested won't be bored by something they don't want to know.
Please excuse me being so critical. This is because I'm touched by your game and I was expecting more than I got from it.
I don't think you've done bad. I bet you can do better.
One of my favorite games is "To the Moon" by Freebird Games. The story in beautiful there. Check it out, I think you'll like it =)

Trite Games says ...
Dec 22, 2014 @ 6:20am

Great mood and interpretation! This is a good start for more. As the first commenter said, more visuals relating to the storyline etc. but well done :)

egor-idiot says ...
Dec 29, 2014 @ 5:45am

Oh that nice one. So sad..

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