Ludum Dare 30 — August 22nd-25th, 2014 — Theme: Connected Worlds

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Capsule

by PaperBlurt - 48 Hour Compo Entry

Alone.

In space.

A vessel the size of Wales, floating through the endless night.
You are the keeper of millions of people.

But what might be happening in Sector 24-R?

* Multiple endings & Multiple Choices *

- - - - - -

A Twine game where the basic idea I got was "Huge space ship in space with one lonely person".
Then the idea evolved somewhat, of course.

Photoshop is used for all crude animations and I also produced all images with it.

If you find any spelling errors or grammatical problems don't be afraid to say so.

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UPDATE 25/8:

- Tweaked the timing.
- Fixed some typos.
- Added the poster on the Start page.

UPDATE 26/8:

- Fixed some typos spotted by "lightsoda".
- Added a cheat link on the very last page to avoid a bug and providing players the possibility to try other endings.

UPDATE 30/8:

- Added a few graphical elements and remade the animation with the fluorescent lights.
(and at the same time I managed to overwrite my original entry, so the post-compo version is all I got now, but it's much better!)

UPDATE 4/9:

- Spelling errors (thanks to kristoffer zetterberg)

UPDATE 11/9:

- Fixed some issues with the font as some browser didn't load them.

Downloads and Links


Ratings

Coolness100%
#20Mood4.13
#79Humor3.44
#120Overall3.74
#250Innovation3.56
#344Fun3.29
#369Graphics3.40
#505Theme3.33
#907Audio1.88

Comments

hypp says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 6:53am

Excellent! I was really caught in the mood of the game!

Hamsternator says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 10:11am

I'm really impressed. Did not expect to get sucked into this storyline the way that I did. Great writing and excellent humour. Would definitely not mind playing an expanded version of this ^^

gardenhead says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 10:44am

Wow, I was ready to quit, but it really sucked me in. Great writing!

Makio says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 10:57am

It remember me my childhood with "the book where you are the hero", a lot of storytelling, long to start but when choice come it give a very nice feeling and you give a lot to the staging, great stuff !

Markavian says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 10:57am

good bye... am I a mass murdered now?

43iscoding says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 10:57am

Thou, good sir, are brilliant! I'm not that much into quests, but this one just sucked me into it :)

The only thing you lack is some moody music.

SteveSalmond says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 10:58am

I was also pulled in by the story and had to read the whole thing :) Some really great writing!

buckslice says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 11:01am

Great story! Really cool effects and graphics. Felt like a movie that I had control over.

A333 says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 11:08am

Writing is terrific, graphics are subtle and clean. Humble animations are really adding to the mood, too.
I've only been slightly annoyed by the Makida console keeps popping after the first slug stop.

Conk says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 11:10am

Wow, I didn't expect to find such a well crafted story! I would play that again! (I assume there are multiple endings)

Aug 25, 2014 @ 11:38am

Spaceman with 70 pornmovies 7.8/7.8
Seriously though, how did you write this in 2 days? It's amazing!

DrCicero says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 11:42am

I like how its not only text, despite being a text game. That makes it easier to get into the game.

Akurn says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 12:45pm

Great writing!

dadman says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 8:10pm

I love the amount of polish in this, it's really cool. I was also properly reading the story, where for some of the other twine games I found myself skimming through the passages.
I did hit a bug where I kept being swapped over to the original monitor screen, however this might have been cause by me clicking previous page in the web browser...? (using Firefox)
Regardless, I restarted and got to the end, so it wasn't a big problem.

Ditto says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 8:11pm

Shit that was good! Maybe the ending felt a bit disappointing, I steered into the loop, it seems a bit rushed compared to the otherwise very solid writing.. Overall it's been a long time since I read something so entertaining, both funny and a bit scary. Really fucking good work dude! :D

lightsoda says ...
Aug 25, 2014 @ 8:44pm

Nice, the story is pretty good and well written.

I did notice a couple of small things
conveyer belt
one itsy bitsy questions

PaperBlurt says ...
Aug 26, 2014 @ 10:33am

--

SOME INFO:


So hi everybody.
Thanks for playing my game.
And I'm glad you liked it...

Some of you have spotted a bug (so have I).
And as I've tried to fix it I'm 99% certain that it only occurs when you go "back" with your back button in the browser at the last Console Screen.

So...DON'T DO THAT!

I've added a little cheat link on the very last page instead that you can use to try the other endings, and hopefully that will solve it!

--

Snoother says ...
Aug 26, 2014 @ 11:03am

I really looked forward to playing your entry after seeing what you did last LD, and this lived up to all my hopes. I think I preferred it to your last one actually: the initial premise is perhaps less gripping, but the story felt more engrossing, it was equally as well written and funny, and it's quite possibly the most gorgeous-looking twine I've seen. It's a high scorer, for me at least. Really don't know how you managed it in 48 hours -- I'm kind of envious.

SketchyGalore says ...
Aug 26, 2014 @ 12:23pm

I, like the other comments, got absorbed and had to read through the whole thing! I'm a big fan of humor in text-pacing (I'm sure there's a word for that), so this was great! Kudos!

Oh, and thank you for your kind comment on my game as well :)

Tommislav says ...
Aug 26, 2014 @ 4:32pm

Love it (as usual). Great mood. I also like the retro font of this futuristic console, and the cameo of Rocky Barbato =D. The graphics were excellent as well and enhanced the mood!

garygreen says ...
Aug 26, 2014 @ 7:57pm

Really enjoyed the story - very absorbing & some funny moments too.

bluemaroo3 says ...
Aug 27, 2014 @ 1:38pm

Brilliant story. Love what you've done with twine. Had me hooked till the end :)

BuffaloPhil says ...
Aug 27, 2014 @ 3:26pm

Really great story, man!

frogcheese says ...
Aug 27, 2014 @ 6:50pm

Great story with a fantastic mood. I was pleasantly surprised by all the little touches on the text and background. It really helped with immersion. Nicely done!

Linusson says ...
Aug 27, 2014 @ 7:00pm

Great story! Very well written. Loved it! Thank you for making this! :)

stasss says ...
Aug 27, 2014 @ 8:02pm

Very original, like it a lot! (Specially moment with wikipedia). Keep going on!

ajopart says ...
Aug 28, 2014 @ 11:33am

Excellent design and story !

Lars Faust says ...
Aug 28, 2014 @ 1:12pm

That really sucked me in. Very moody.

I felt the ending was a bit strange, though. Why would i drop 3 compartments and kill 70m people, when not dropping any and just fly through the loop as it is would kill the "bad guys", who are not in their protective tubes, just as well?

I really like these interactive-story submissions though. Good one.

dook says ...
Aug 28, 2014 @ 2:33pm

That was super engaging! I love the setting and it had a pleasant pacing. Good humour too. I'll try it again later on and make some different choices.

In my game's comment thread you mentioned some other games using Unity+Twine, do you remember which ones? I'd like to try them :)

nilstastic says ...
Aug 28, 2014 @ 8:31pm

Pros: Excellent story!
Cons: None actually, i really enjoyed this one. =)

egor-idiot says ...
Aug 29, 2014 @ 8:06am

Oh that one is really cool. I didn't get to the end on my work, but definately will in the evening. Well done.

Crowbeak says ...
Aug 29, 2014 @ 12:39pm

Well written, with graphics and CSS used to good effect. I quite enjoyed this.

tmpxyz says ...
Aug 29, 2014 @ 12:51pm

great story! like it!

Artamus says ...
Aug 29, 2014 @ 6:25pm

Nice and well written game, congrats!

AdricZero says ...
Aug 30, 2014 @ 2:17pm

Really could have used some music to improve the audio and mood scores. Liked the storyline though.

Hypnohustla says ...
Aug 31, 2014 @ 12:14pm

Crazy good presentation for a text game! Well written and captivating story :)

leafarz says ...
Aug 31, 2014 @ 12:23pm

wow really great story here! and the mood was great but would love to have audios to complement!
great visuals also. and i like how the title bar gives your status in the game.
good job! :D

GrooveMan says ...
Aug 31, 2014 @ 9:09pm

Oh man, there's a whole bunch of stuff here I had no idea you could do in Twine! This is really technically impressive.

The spaceventure was super engaging, but upon finding an ending, it seems to boot me to a menu that will take me to other random (and slightly contextless) endings. Hm.

Sep 2, 2014 @ 11:29pm

Liked a lot of the aspects of this, especially the animation and several of the technical details. As always you are a proficient technical Twinesman. It got a tiny bit goofy at the end, which I wasn't as huge of a fan of, but I liked it.

Sep 4, 2014 @ 10:13am

grymt jobbat PaperBlurt! alltid kul att se hur du utvecklas i din användning av Twine-formatet lite mer för varje spel du gör. hur du använder humor, små absurda inslag, för att lätta upp och göra berättelsen mer underhållande är dessutom riktigt bra, även om det spårar ut lite mot slutet. men extremt spännande där ett tag, och gillade speciellt hur du fick in konsoler och annat genom animationer och transitions.

några stavfel dock:
"To not being _be_ alone at the same time as you approach, nay stalk, with caution."

minns inte exakt vad det stod men:
"Space-Decibels" - borde det inte vara "Space-disciple" med tanke på kontexten, eller är det något skämt jag inte förstår?

Sep 4, 2014 @ 10:15am

oops, doesn't work att skriva vissa tecken tydligen. oh well, du fattar antar jag.

Sascha says ...
Sep 7, 2014 @ 8:02pm

Great story! Such a great use of different media, colors and page-styles to create different settings and atmosphere! Enjoyed playing it very much!

whalebot says ...
Sep 10, 2014 @ 1:49am

Excellent writing. I thoroughly enjoyed that.

voxel says ...
Sep 10, 2014 @ 6:30pm

This is nice, it's too bad the clown image isn't original :( http://38.media.tumblr.com/06e507c703e9933695986d784a551df2/tumblr_natrhktUHM1qzknwuo1_1280.png you can't just run a filter over a photo and pretend you drew it during the compo. They might stand for that in Jam land, but we have standards sonny.

Other than that, really solid effort. One of the better LD twines for sure

Sep 10, 2014 @ 9:52pm

Such a good game, really well written and funny.

apiotrw says ...
Sep 13, 2014 @ 4:18pm

Great mood

Sep 14, 2014 @ 11:20pm

Nice feel to it! I included it in part 26 of my Ludum Dare 30 compilation video series, if you’d like to take a look :) http://youtu.be/hvOt_bkuFkM

AkirAssasin says ...
Sep 15, 2014 @ 12:52pm

Hahah that clown dude became the god :D but I can't finish it, it keeps bringing me to the console page after I chose my decision on whether to be with the 24-Rs

raddevon says ...
Sep 15, 2014 @ 1:29pm

This is incredible! Some of the slickest IF I've seen in a long while.

PixelFeet says ...
Sep 15, 2014 @ 5:25pm

Both the story and its presentation were superb. Great work!

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