Ludum Dare 29 — April 25th-28th Weekend — Theme: Beneath the Surface

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A bot is sinking

by Melondonut - Jam Entry

A boat is sinking.

It is a text-based game.
I hope you to find out what is beneath the surface.

made by twine 2.0 alpha

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Ratings

#260Mood(Jam)3.30
#335Innovation(Jam)3.09
#472Theme(Jam)2.96
#597Overall(Jam)2.80
#703Fun(Jam)2.15
#1460Coolness46%

Comments

Rick Hoppmann says ...
Apr 28, 2014 @ 11:22pm

I wouldn't say that's a game, but a digital story with various branches to discover. Anyway, the story was ok, but missing some interesting twist to me.
I rather dislike the present tense for telling a story.

cr2crstudios says ...
Apr 28, 2014 @ 11:37pm

Interesting story. Good interface!

Apr 28, 2014 @ 11:42pm

Thank you for telling this story. It was illuminating about the recent event.

PaperBlurt says ...
Apr 29, 2014 @ 6:29am

I'm not the one to judge as I too have typos and grammatical errors in my Twines, but here they are a bit too many.

But I DO like twines that doesn't take place in a fantasy world or in space.

Keep it up!

Melondonut says ...
Apr 29, 2014 @ 6:46am

thank your for your comments. I will correct the grammatical errors soon. :D

Snoother says ...
Apr 29, 2014 @ 8:34am

Yeah, a few too many grammatical errors, but I too am pleased to play a twine game that isn't fantastical. The subject matter was certainly interesting and well-dealt-with, but the prose felt a bit plane.

Snoother says ...
Apr 29, 2014 @ 8:36am

*plain

Mandlebar says ...
Apr 29, 2014 @ 1:14pm

A really interesting take on the theme and relevant to recent events! Story was well told too!

Melondonut says ...
Apr 29, 2014 @ 3:38pm

I know my writing is poor. ;( I have to study English a lot more. Thank you for playing and comments!

micdoodle8 says ...
May 1, 2014 @ 6:59am

Nice job, very unique and interesting story.

Tomski says ...
May 4, 2014 @ 9:01pm

interesting idea!

Melondonut says ...
May 7, 2014 @ 5:54pm

Thanks for playing :D good to hear that!

May 8, 2014 @ 5:29am

It's a good history. Maybe later you can add some images.

Melondonut says ...
May 8, 2014 @ 3:55pm

thanks for your comment :D I will consider it

ArthurMaker says ...
May 9, 2014 @ 8:44am

Okay Pretty good work for being a text based game , WELL DONE.... CHECK OUT MY GAME

Rabbits... says ...
May 16, 2014 @ 9:47pm

I've been following this on the news, It was cool seeing your prospective on the matter.

Melondonut says ...
May 19, 2014 @ 2:28am

Thank you all! phew. there are still missing people.. about 10. It was just a disaster by human-error.

wschorn says ...
May 19, 2014 @ 3:15am

some nice writing but no assets, no clear writing style or characters

Clinthoney says ...
May 19, 2014 @ 4:13am

Not a bad game just wish you gave the entry a name. Would of been nice if you had some kind sounds.

aeveis says ...
May 19, 2014 @ 5:28am

The different versions were interesting in revealing what actually happened.

Acuity says ...
May 19, 2014 @ 7:27am

It felt like the story needed more branches to me, but otherwise interesting.

Melondonut says ...
May 24, 2014 @ 4:55am

@wschorn yup. I admit it. I tried to make it really dried.
and actually there are many episodes regarding this accident so I could make some characters. but I was afraid that I would hurt the families of missing people if they play my game. ....I didn't want to make any unreal character, nor characters based on real people.

Melondonut says ...
May 24, 2014 @ 4:56am

@Clinthoney yea it was really strange. I definitely put the title, but somehow it changed to jam entry. now I fixed it. thx for advice.

Melondonut says ...
May 24, 2014 @ 4:57am

@aeveis Thanks!
@Acuity yea I made little branched on purpose. I just wanted to let the truth known. I know what you exactly mean.. thank you. :D

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